Your sentences are too long. Shorten your sentences!
As an editor, I’m more descriptive instead of prescriptive. I know that audience, context and genre shape meaning. Language is a shifting beast–but more problematically than that, the so-called ‘rules’ of grammar and writing are arbitrary, classist, colonialist, even wrong.
But I’m still going to tell you to shorten your sentences. Aim to keep them no longer than 25 words. Here’s why & how.